My manga: Weapon Alpha and Omega

[polistiren]

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A SF manga, set in an post apocalyptic setting.

I will greatly appreciate all the feedback and constructive criticism. In fact, I'm looking for it. ;D

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Note to moderator: I doubt the manga's more 'grim' mood goes against the forum rules(since I wouldn't have any extreme violence, and even if it were to have, deviant art does have a rating system in place), but if it does (the apearence guns, witch were in Brody's Ghost book 2, cigarettes and so on) then I appologise and feel free to remove this thread.

[Shadow Major]

This is great stuff! I like the way how you used lots of detail for the buildings and backgrounds! The plot seems pretty interesting enough - keep it up!
If you want a word of advice, perhaps try finishing around 20 pages and then upload four of them a day. That way you don't really have to work as hard, but it's just a suggestion. Also, when posting new links for new pages, try editing just one of your posts and develop a list so that you don't have to keep replying to all your previous posts and for the convenience of your readers .
Anyway, this is good - keep up the awesome work man.

[polistiren]

Thanks! Regarding the plot, I'm planning to explain a little in the pages that follow(much needed I'd say). With the 20 page thing, I don't know. I prefer to have two pages each week so that anyone who reads it wouldn't have to wait God knows how long for new pages. But thanks for the advice nevertheless.

[Shadow Major]

Yeah, don't pay attention to my silly 20 page suggestion . It's your own work, and you are free to do whatever you want.

[saitogarama]

Interesting manga, seriously. I want more pages!!!
There'is a plot, a trailer, sorry for language...-_-'

[saitogarama]

Sorry I wanted to say if there is a plot?

[polistiren]

Thanks for replying. And yes, there would be more pages. At the moment I have put the series on hold for a few reasons, primary to refine the art. I still have the script for about 15 more pages in, but I simply am not happy with the art style. I'm just no good with screentones(and yes, I know that's not the only problem with my art, but I haven't got feedback, negative one at least, to notice others), therefore I teach myself to work without them(kinda like Taiyō Matsumoto's Tekkonkinkreet, but with different stylistic choices).
Then, there's also the slow start of the story witch bothers me(again, I have the script for further pages), so I think it's best if I reboot it all. Consider this first 6 pages a prototype. Or like the Alpha( ;D ) version of a videogame.
Again, thanks for replying and I apologize if this is a letdown.

[saitogarama]

not at all. thank you for the answer.

[Caliber Mengsk]

Just remember to double check your spelling before uploading a final page. (Acces should be Access)

Also, shadows can go a long way to making depth appear.