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Post by leucome on Sept 22, 2012 20:58:36 GMT -5
The beginning of my first page for a french canadian contest. The rule is to do a story resume and the first 2 of 6 pages of a story about forest and lumberjack. So i will try to push more than usualy. First price 2000$ and there are 6 price and all six are published. I finished the sketch of the first panel . I work with an insane 139 mega pixels file . I can draw a fly on the back of the dear lol . Attachments:
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Post by leucome on Sept 22, 2012 21:05:33 GMT -5
The lumberjack face test .. I'm not sure which one to chose for my guy . ! Attachments:
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Post by dvandom on Sept 23, 2012 15:30:57 GMT -5
The choice of face depends a LOT on the tone of the story you're trying to hit. I see everything from hyuk-hyuk through psycho axe murderer in that set.
---Dave
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Post by leucome on Sept 24, 2012 11:15:32 GMT -5
The narrator talk in a quite serious way about live, death, fate and danger of lumberjack work .
Wile the main character get in to trouble in a quite funny way. Like being jammed in mud with is tractor . Cutting a tree to make a trail. But accidentally killing a weasel . After the tree fall on is tractor and he got trapped under the tree when he tryed to remove it.
While trapped under the tree he tink about is wife and is daughter. And Tadam. his wife came to help him. She was worried because he his late.
The Narrator conclude by : You think it's an happy ending you forgot i'm dead! . Say the weasle gost ..
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Post by dvandom on Sept 24, 2012 16:57:44 GMT -5
In that case, I'd go with #13, but make him look a little older.
---Dave
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Post by leucome on Sept 24, 2012 17:25:54 GMT -5
Thanks  I finally chosen number 13 . And it's not because I watched House M.D lol .. I got most vote for 13, 10 and 6 on my facebook. I found that I was totally unable to draw the tractor. So thanks to all those years that I made game Mods I was able to make one in 3d and use it. Attachments:
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Post by leucome on Sept 25, 2012 22:30:52 GMT -5
With some colors. It really take more time than expected. I will not have much time to sleep if i wish to finish it in time . Attachments:
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Post by leucome on Sept 28, 2012 1:12:30 GMT -5
First page release candidate. I'll probably desaturate the tractor or I don't know, I do not really like it now. Attachments:
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Post by leucome on Sept 28, 2012 1:13:31 GMT -5
The bacgrounds of those pages is done more like a painting than a drawing . Only the character and the tractor have outline.I looked at a bunch of forest painting, acrylic and oil, tutorials before to do this. Also there are some rumor that Manga studio is not good for color  I don't really believe it .. lol Second Page release candidate. Attachments:
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Post by polistiren on Sept 28, 2012 9:14:02 GMT -5
Hm... The character and the tractor doesn't blend well with the more hyper detailed backgrounds. Since he's in a forest, try adding the shadows from the tree's leaves on them(something like this: www.google.ro/search?hl=ro&newwindow=1&safe=off&biw=1360&bih=667&tbm=isch&sa=1&q=tree%27s+leaves+shadows&oq=tree%27s+leaves+shadows&gs_l=img.3...34672.40250.0.40444.21.21.0.0.0.0.97.1582.21.21.0...0.0...1c.1.h-3bhvOFOSI). That should help the blending. Eventually you can make the light-spots shinier on the tractor, make the shadows gradually disappear, and so on. Also, not much you can do now, but at the secound page, you have 4 panels with roughly the same size. Generally the panels showld varry as much as possible. If you have time to modify them, try making the in different shapes. One last thing. The sound effects you do with those white lines, looks a little to cartoony, and because of the background style, it feels out of place. Other than that, great job. All looks awesome! |
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Post by leucome on Sept 28, 2012 10:49:27 GMT -5
I added some leaf shadow it really help for the tractor thanks . I desaturated it a little too. But real red and orange tractor do not really blend well in nature lol. The white lines are removed to . I don't have time to change the 4 panels . So I hope that the other's arent that good but it's hard to guess because the contest is open even to published pro and team. |
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Post by polistiren on Sept 28, 2012 11:02:15 GMT -5
You shouldn't get penalized to much for that 4 panels thing.
And with the tractor is good that it stands out a little, same with the lumberjacker. The reason it doesn't blend is because red doesn't belong near green. Try making it a different color like blue(a more greenish blue).
Hope you've got time for that, though.
Regardless, good luck!
Ps: If you removed the white lines, try some sfx to replace them, like "brrrrr" or something. If they're some rules or something(I don't see dialogue so I'm just guessing) use dirt splashes or alike.
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Post by leucome on Sept 28, 2012 14:53:07 GMT -5
I tought about dirt splash . But i forgot to do it so the white line for whell are still there .. I removed those from the tree and put a crack sound. Tractor color is like an old Belarus and they flash in a forest for sure . lol. So anyone can easily know it's a belarus tractor and an husqvarna chainsaw. There the files I printed and mailed. I think it look beter on paper. But the "I" in bird sound is almost unreadable. OH. At this size we can see a bunh of mistake . news.leucome.ca/files/bu_01.pngnews.leucome.ca/files/bu_02.png |
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Post by PJCzar on Nov 28, 2012 2:52:17 GMT -5
great work all in all. The beckgrounds are great! i wish i could paint backgrounds like that.
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Post by leucome on Dec 4, 2012 23:06:20 GMT -5
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Post by leucome on Dec 7, 2012 18:04:06 GMT -5
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I finally chosen number 13 . And it's not because I watched House M.D lol .. 
I don't really believe it .. lol 
I think maybe my storytelling need some improvement ..