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Post by neilsugg on Mar 12, 2013 20:18:11 GMT -5
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Post by cn3wton on Mar 13, 2013 15:15:13 GMT -5
Im not sure if you want a critique or not, so I will refrain from doing that for now.
I noticed on your dA page that you want to learn. I am just curious why you are drawing and what you want to learn.
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Post by neilsugg on Mar 13, 2013 22:53:56 GMT -5
In drawing as a hobby mostly, and only when I really have time. But I'd also like to turn a book I started writing about a year ago in to a manga. Just one to say I did it nothing global in scale and you can critique me but do be constructive. I know heads to big, line work is very straight and are uneven in width, and left hand isn't to hot but this was my first time at a full body ever so I expected to have many flaws. I'd love to know how to improve upon it for next time how to make it better not just whats wrong. Do you draw just for fun?
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Post by neilsugg on Mar 13, 2013 22:55:36 GMT -5
In really trying to find a local art class when I'm not working.
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Shadow Major
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Current project: The Realm Wanderer
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Post by Shadow Major on Mar 14, 2013 1:55:51 GMT -5
There's a section on this forum called "Art Talk" where you submit artwork if you want it to be critiqued. Otherwise people just think you want to showcase your work without critiques, hence "Showing Off" Talk to dvandom about moving this thread.
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Post by neilsugg on Mar 15, 2013 23:23:55 GMT -5
Well this was originally about showing that I've gotten better but I can make a new post for that.
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Post by neilsugg on Apr 5, 2013 23:40:12 GMT -5
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Post by dvandom on Apr 8, 2013 13:09:12 GMT -5
Went ahead and moved it. ---Dave
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Post by cn3wton on May 16, 2013 8:21:53 GMT -5
Havent been back in awhile so sorry about the super late reply. I hope you see this.
Anyways I don't really critique manga and anime stuff anymore, because I personally don't like 90% of it. Its not because its not well drawn, but because it all looks so similar in style that it allows no creativity from the artist.
Anyways this critique may sound like I am ripping your picture apart, but please understand that I do this so you can address the problems and get better. If I say "great work" then youll never get better.
Proportion issues are one of the biggest problems here. His right fore arm that goes across his body is too long. His legs appear to be too short for his body, this is partly because the neck is too long. Since he is young his head will be larger proportionally to his body than an adult, but since his neck sticks out so far he looks more like a late teens boys head on a childs body.
His head has some problems too, the eyes appear to be shifted to the right of the face.
The clothing in general is ok. But I would add a little more bulkiness to it since it all appears to be skin tight. His cloak is confusing, if it was hanging off of him it would not look like that. I think the issue is that you were trying to make this picture appear to have action, but since he is standing there statically the flowing coat, twirling chain, and the pocket watch chain, and tie just seem like they are blowing in a really awkward unrealistic wind.
I would suggest on working on proportions and anatomy, get those down really well and always build your character "naked" at first. Then apply the clothes to them so they have the proper weight to them so they appear to be loose and actually on the character, not just skin tight.
So I am sorry if that appeared extremely strict, but I want to commend you for attempting a full body picture. The first time you do it isn't going to be great (trust me I have been there). And I will say copying a manga/anime character will just make it worse. I suggest using reference and learning how to stylize it.
Good luck and I look forward to seeing your next work.
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